muscle, mud and haiku

By SOLO

Learn how to write haiku is was one of the items on my bucket list. These little short poems just always seemed so incredibly intimidating.

Earlier this week, I Google “how to write haiku” over a cup of coffee. Here we go…

Haiku is a short form of (originally) Japanese poetry. Rough translation of the poetry format to English includes 17 syllables in three phrases of 5, 7, and 5, respectively.

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kiru or “cutting”, one of the signature techniques of haiku – includes a juxtaposition of two images. For example, a poet could contrast two observations at a micro and at a macro level – a drop of dew on lily flower and silence of the forest. A classic haiku often describes nature or change of seasons.

Haiku also often end with an observation. For example, you could start out by commenting on how good strawberries smell, and then end with a conclusion that summer has arrived.

Obstacle racing haiku… GO!

ice cubes feel so cold
as I crawl on my belly –
I love barbed wire

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drop of sweat rolls down
exhausted pile on the floor
burpees suck so much

chafing thighs feel good
I carry heavy sandbag
Vermont, face to face

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barbell is my friend
she’s cold, and sleek in my palm
so good for buttocks

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how many push-ups
does it take to feel self-worth?
two Goruck patches
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peel off your layers
discover purple bruises
earned orange headband

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It’s actually a lot of fun to be locked into a rigid structure like that. Haiku is Sudoku with words. A problem to solve, as the phrase you have in mind does not conform to the number of syllables, you are forced to reconsider. To see the image differently. To use another word.

Writing haiku is like playing with food. Throw all the words on the table, and mix them around, squishing phrases between your fingers.

I can’t stop. 🙂

a stack of pancakes
pillows and blankets messy
it’s perfect Sunday

a paper cup
a perfect curl of sea foam
my lips part slightly

smile frozen solid
across the water soaring
a winter pond

Another famous one…

Another bucket list item crossed off.

My English teacher readers – please feel free to pipe up. I’ve never had to count syllables in my life, and I’m pretty sure I suck.

Wanna play? I challenge you to write a muddy haiku! Or a muscle haiku! Or hell, any haiku! (Haiku about hell?)

Signing off,
Solo

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Posted May 30, 2013

11 responses to “muscle, mud and haiku”

  1. Muscles are my friend
    Strong is better than skinny
    Let’s do one more set

  2. From the lies spectators tell:

    Look, you’re almost there!
    Just over that next hill, then–
    (Eleven more miles.)

  3. Techcowgirl says:

    Spartan is Grueling, Shouldn’t ever be easy, Can’t wait till next time!

  4. Karén says:

    Off-top: you shoulders on the second pic are simply perfect! 🙂

  5. Kathleen Horacek says:

    Running is my friend
    Except when I’m out of breath
    That run was today.

    Does this count sista?

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  7. Roz Coates says:

    I LOVE these! Here’s a few of mine … they’re kind of more nature-y:

    Rolled into silence
    on darkening ocean’s edge
    a seagull sleeping

    Silver fish spawning
    in shallow rapid water
    splashy spring morning

    No help for this heat:
    not even a single bird
    in the sun bleached sky

    Tree shadowed water
    steep brown rooted riverbank
    wiggly snake swimmer

    The streets are quiet:
    no companion follows me
    only the small moon

    Sudden autumn wind
    strips a solitary tree
    leaf flock flies away

    Her veins made road maps
    blue lines on her thin grey skin
    so many journeys

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